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The rising sun
Painting the sky with colors
Welcoming new day

Cerulean sky
Turning orange, red, and pink
Beautiful artwork




The Seasons



Buds come to life
Sweet aroma in the air
Birds are chirping

Trees shedding their leaves
Yellow leaves crunch below feet
Changing of seasons

White snowflakes falling
Icicles hanging from roof
Cold winter morning



Nature



Cocoon hangs from branch
Will soon emerge a butterfly
Beginning new life

Light summer showers
Brings out art work in the sky
Ribbons of color




Waterfall



White mists of beauty
Deafening sound of thunder
True force of nature
A series of haikus. (c) 2012 Thu Ya Win.

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:iconlostkudzu:
LostKudzu Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely!
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:icontyw7:
tyw7 Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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LostKudzu Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome :)
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moyanII Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you might like to check out some of the resources on haiku listed on the first page of #the-haiku-club.
haiku writing is not just about syllables' counting, so you don't have to excessively worry about that. :)
also, haiku do not have titles traditionally. it is essential to tell everything, obvious and implied, in just those few words.

anyway, for a starter you might like to read this article to know the original form and intention of haiku:
[link]
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:icontyw7:
tyw7 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The reason for the title is to seperate one haiku from another.
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:iconmoyanii:
moyanII Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The separation should be clear even without titles.
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:icontyw7:
tyw7 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
So I should just remove the titles?
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moyanII Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes. Perhaps with a little regrouping of the haiku, sunrise-sunset, spring-autumn-winter, waterfall-butterfly. Then the link should be clear enough without indication.
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:icontyw7:
tyw7 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
How's the new grouping?
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:iconmoyanii:
moyanII Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the last three could probably be grouped under 'garden' or something like that.
although, there is a slight problem that the waterfall verse is a little unclear without the title. a haiku should be clear without a title.
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tyw7 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The first two?
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akky3210 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm a huge haiku fan. These are amazing!!
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nohlja Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
I've always enjoyed the minimalism of a haiku, and these flow so nicely into each other =)
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Third-person Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
Lovely
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:iconcskadoz:
cskadoz Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012   General Artist
:dance: :headbang: :dance: 'nough said
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:icontyw7:
tyw7 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Did you read my limerick?
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:iconcskadoz:
cskadoz Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012   General Artist
oh? not yet. :yoda: i will :batman:
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RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
First line in Sunrise has only four syllables.
Second line in Sunset has only six syllables.
Third line in Winter has six syllables.
First line in Spring has only four syllables.
Third line in Spring has only four syllables.

^ That's just by my count though. All that aside it was a lovely set of haikus that painted vivid pictures of yellow leaves that turn to orange skies. From frigid mornings in the season of death to the birth of a butterfly and the sound of thunder. Great work.
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tyw7 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how to change that line :(
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RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh well. Maybe add a colour? I don't know either, never was too good at structured poetry.
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:icontyw7:
tyw7 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcoming (3) new (1) day (1) = 5
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:iconrainyhawaiiv2:
RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I said the first line, not the third.
The (1) rising (2) sun (3) = 4
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tyw7 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Umm I just recounted and those have 7. Turning (2) orange (2), red (1), and (1) pink (1)
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RainyhawaiiV2 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, yes, I see now. I counted orange as one syllable. I looked it up and numerous sources said that it could be one or two. My apologizes, I didn't take that into account.
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FallingStarXIV Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012
I love your haikus, they're great!
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